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Scientists believe that in order to protect the environment, people must use less energy in their daily lives. However, most people have not changed the way they live. Why do you think many people have not taken individual action? What could be done to encourage them to take action?

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Energy demand is soaring as economies
is moving
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are moving
 towards revolution of technology and inventions.There are major amount of productions happened with the help of fossil fuels and now it is available in a lesser quantity.People of any country have their different options on the particular topic.
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 essay will highlight the reason and some practical solutions to control the environment. It is obvious that consumption of energy has increased which will
fullfill
put in effect
fulfil
 the requirements of people which have other demerits too.
Moreover
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, Scientists believe that people should reduce the consumption rate of energy will be
better way
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a better way
 to save the environment while
maximum number
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the maximum number
 of people have not taken any action which help to control it.
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, we can say that
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 is everyone's responsibility to take action which will save our environmental balance. Have we worked
to
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for
 aware people for
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?. We have
tried but
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tried, but
 not able to get the positive results yet. On the other side, People haven't been
tried
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trying
 to
changed
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change
 their way of living standard.For
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an item of information that is typical of a class or group
example
, in Indonesia, people have banned to open new factories which will harmful for the atmosphere in the future
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 their environmental index rank top the chart.
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, still people think only on their accountability and try to establish new one, but the government is
stricted
having definite and highly organized structure
structured
 and frame the policy
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. In conclusion, we can't blame any individual for degradation but
must be raise
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must raise
 the interest with the rudimentary norms because
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 will change their way of thinking
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on
about
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 particular matter.According to me, neglecting the issues will become more
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concerned
 in the future and energy is the obligatory needs
for
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of
 every individual.

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