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Big salary is more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

#salary #job #satisfaction
Many believe, earning a good wage is vital, irrespective of their
job
 satisfaction and few thinks in an opposite way. I believe
job
 satisfaction is more important than working without interest for a big pay because, life is to live happier and everything else is secondary.
First
 of all, a person who enjoys
job
 can concentrate more on his or her
work
, often produce better results. They may
also
work
 longer hours effectively, which in-turn helps the company
growth
Suggestion
grow
grows
 or goodwill with the clients.
For example
, one of my friends joined in a small accounting firm in 2011. Even though, he is paid less, he enjoys his
job
 and helped his employee in generating good amounts of margins than expected. On the other side, if an employee cannot
work
 productively because of the lack of interest in his
job
, there are high chances of making mistakes which affect his career in
the longer
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the long
 run. If one is happy in his
job
 and even if salary is less, he has a chance to prove his skills and by showcasing it to the employee, they can understand the salary concerns and promote him.
For example
, I use to
work
 for a very less wage while I was working back in India, my manager identifies my talent and offered me an on-site chance.
From
Suggestion
Since
then
, both
work
 and pay wise, I am in a better position than my friends who joined along with me. To conclude,
although
, a bigger pay scale person may enjoy the benefits of being luxurious, without proper concentration he may make a lot of mistakes which affects his career. So I prefer to do a
job
 I enjoy irrespective of the wage.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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