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During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter remind him when and where you met tell him what kind of job you are interested in say why you think you would be suitable for the job

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Dear sir, I am
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 davell. I happen to meet you during New York to Paris flight in Turkish
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 on July 23, where you sat beside me and advised me if I would like to work with you in one of your
restaurant
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. Now I am considering your great proposal to get better opportunities. I am fortunate to meet you coincidentally I was on the vacation and trying to release the stress of work. I have accepted your offer and make you assure that I am graduated from New York University in management after that I
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persued
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further
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 diploma
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 hotel and Management courses and done my M.Phil in
administration
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 sector. Having remarkable managerial skills and 10 years of experience while conducting numerous workshops and trained hundreds of people in the same fields. Despite all
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, I am happy with my current job but I am willing to face new more challenging things so that
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 can flourish my capabilities
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. I would kindly appreciate
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your prompt action on behalf of my accomplishments. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
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 truly, Marvis Davell.
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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chain of restaurants
  • potential job opportunity
  • relevant experience
  • managerial role
  • customer service
  • qualifications
  • certifications
  • unique skills
  • eagerness
  • admiration
  • resume
  • references
  • face-to-face meeting
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