Eating too much of sugar is harmful for health. Some people think it is government's responsibility to limit people's sugar consumption while others think it is individual's responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Eating
sugar
very much is not good for health. Majority of masses think that
government
should limit the
amount
of
sugar
consumption
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consumed
while opponents believe that it is
individual's
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the individual's responsibility
an individual's responsibility
responsibility
to eat less
amount
of
sugar
.
This
eassy
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
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will discuss both contradictory arguments. I,
however
, side with lateral view. There are some reasons why few people think that it is
government
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a government responsibility
responsibility
to
control
the number
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the amount
of
sugar
consumption
.
First
and foremost reason is that the daily
consumption
of
sugar
is very high. To put it simply, due to increasing
amount
of
sugar
consumption
, the price of
sugar
is very
less
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less, therefore
therefore
people eat
sugar
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
much which leads many health problems like
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;
obesity. If
government
control
the
consumption
of
sugar
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sugar, then
then
this
problem might be solved. A survey which had been conducted in Australia in 2017 could be an ideal example of
this
,
this
survey showed almost 40% people
control
their eating habit of
sugar
when
government
decreased the
amount
of
sugar
consumption
and price of
sugar
increased.
On the other hand
, few people believe its individual
responsibility
to
control
their eating
habit
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habits
of
sugar
. As a reason, a person can
control
eating
sugar
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
much because
sugar
is not beneficial for health. A rich people can easily purchase
sugar
according to own need because one cannot face any financial problem, and easily store
sugar
in own factories. A
best
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good
illustration is that my uncle who is very rich person so who can easily purchase
sugar
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
much and eat it. So it is
individual
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an individual responsibility
responsibility
to
control
eat
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eating
sugar
because of its I'll effects. As
such it
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such, it
can be concluded that
although
government
contol
power to direct or determine
control
the
consumption
of
sugar
, In my perspective,
individual
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individuals
an individual
the individual
can
batter
surpass in excellence
better
solve
this
problem through
control
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the control
on eating habit of
sugar
.
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