Some people believe that women should play an equal role as men in a country's police force or military force, such as the army, while others think women are not suitable for these kinds of jobs. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

people
Suggestion
People
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believed
that women should play
eqaual
having the same quantity, value, or measure as another
equal
role
in
miltary
of or relating to the study of the principles of warfare
military
force like army while
on the other hand
it is
oppsed
being in opposition or having an opponent
opposed
upset
that
this
role
is not suitable for women
firstly
Suggestion
Firstly
, men and women
has played
Suggestion
have played
equal
role
in all departments
.
Accept space
.
concern
Suggestion
Concern
about army force
mens
the force of workers available
men
play important on
border
Suggestion
the border
or loc where as
womens
an adult female person (as opposed to a man)
women
has been one step back in
this
kind of
role
.
Accept space
.
secondly
Suggestion
Secondly
,
Accept space
,
many women are brave
eqaual
having the same quantity, value, or measure as another
equal
to
mens so few
Suggestion
men, so few
men so few
means so few
mend so few
will have courage to be a part of army force and
few
Suggestion
a few
will have some other kind of skill
neverthless
despite anything to the contrary (usually following a concession)
nevertheless
; in todays
genaration
all the people living at the same time or of approximately the same age
generation
generating
all genders are equally
particepated
Suggestion
participating
participated
participate
participates
in every department men and women have same equalities
.
Accept space
.

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