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chart shows the weekly leisure time spent in hours by men and women under different employment status in year 1998-99

chart shows the weekly leisure time spent in hours by men and women under different employment status in year 1998-99
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The chart shows the weekly
leisure
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time
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 spent in
hours
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 by
men
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 and
women
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 under different
employment
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status
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statuses
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 in
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the year
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year
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years
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 1998-99. Both the unemployed and retired
men
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 and
women
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 spend
the
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a
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 large chunk of their
time
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 in
leisure
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 among all the different
employment
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status
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statuses
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. In both these categories,
men
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 still spend more
leisure
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time
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 around 85
hours
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 per week which is 10
hours
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 more than
the
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apply
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women
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.
Overall
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,
men
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leads
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lead
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women
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 in
leisure
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time
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spend
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spent
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 among all the
employment
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 categories. It can
also
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 be noticed that no
men
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is
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are
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 interested in
the
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apply
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part-
time
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 jobs and in the
housewives
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housewife
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 role. Only
women
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 can be found in these
employment
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 statuses. Housewives
women
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 typically spend around 50
hours
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leisure
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of leisure
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time
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 per week
whereas
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the
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apply
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part-
time
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 employed
women
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 spend around 40
hours
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 of their
time
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 in
leisure
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. Full-
time
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 employed
men
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 and
women
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 spend the least
time
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 in
leisure
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 weekly compared to all other
employment
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 statuses.
Men
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 still in
this
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 category manage to spend more
leisure
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time
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 compared to the
women
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 which
is
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are
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 around 45
hours
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, 10
hours
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 more than the
women
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words leisure, time, hours, men, women, employment with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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