Some people think it is a good thing for senior managers to have much higher salaries than the other workers in a company. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is true that senior managers play a vital role in the company’s management so as to achieve targets.
While
some believe that such
high-level holders should be paid handsome salaries as compared to junior workers, I, however
, agree with this
thought for two reasons.
One concern in terms of higher salaries is an
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experience
. Senior executives play an integral role in upbringing
firm’s future. Only workers who have Correct article usage
the upbringing
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long-term
experience
are to be paid the
decent salaries as they know management’s input and output very well. Correct article usage
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For example
, a survey shows that 85% of a
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gaining
the company’s goal Verb problem
achieving
due to
acknowledging the firm’s tic-tack. Therefore
, usually, they are mostly high paid employees than others.
Responsibility is another area. The senior executive position demands a great number of responsibilities to deal with. For instance
, a branch manager has to look for the entire operation of the branch, whereas
, a junior level
employee only needs to take care of their respective job. Add a hyphen
junior-level
Similarly
, a customer care executive only
responsible for answering the Add a missing verb
is only
query
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queries
while
marketing managers have to answer why a product fails in the market to the board of management.
In conclusion, not only do senior managers deserve higher remuneration than juniors because of valuable work experience
, but also
they have dealt with enough job responsibilities for achieving
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Therefore
, I strongly believe that they should pay much than a fresh experience
employee.Replace the word
experienced
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task response
Provide more specific examples and evidence to support your points. Use a wider range of vocabulary and improve sentence structure for better coherence and cohesion.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, but the essay lacks clear and comprehensive ideas supported with relevant specific examples.