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Human activities have had negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that it cannot be changed, while other believes action can be taken to bring about a change. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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Since the dawn of the time, humans have been consuming all the available resources in the world. Some people opine that impossible to change or to stop these activities, while others believe s
trict
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stricter
laws can protect the world. In my perspective, the countries could save the humans by doing these areas supervision over the governments. To start, with an exponential expansion in human beings, more food, materials, and shelter are being manufactured at stupendous rates, mostly stemming from forestry which destroyed forests in a few countries. Pharmaceutical researches use r
are animal
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rare animals
a rare animal
in industrial medicine; to get a high profit from the products.
For example
, 18 million acres of trees are c
lear-cut each
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clear-cut, each
year to make way for new development and wood products-
that is
 just under half of all the trees on the planet since the industrial revolution began. While m
arkets
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market
drugs killed 1000 rare w
hale
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whales
at
l
ast ten years
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the last ten years
to produce vitamins.
On the other hand
, the g
overnments
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government
authorities should t
o make
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make
strict-laws to sustain the environment. Undoubtedly, the governments should prohibit companies and individuals from turn the forests wastelands and using fertilizers the go down through to the rivers.
For instance
, environmental protection who is protecting the natural environment.
Thus
, these laws will lead to protect the plants and animals from extinction. To conclude, humans need the natural resources, but they squander that inheritance. Indeed, strict laws will protect the natural. In my opinion, if these laws a
pplication
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applications
in all countries, we will pass these n
atural
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nature
issues.

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