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8.22 to 8.36 The pie charts illustrate the percentage of British
student
Suggestion
students
 who are able to speak languages other than
english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
 in the
year
 of 2000 and 2010. Overall, Near one
third
 of British
student
 was only able to speak Spanish
language
 in the
year
 of 2000 and 2010, while
student
 who speak german is
remain
Suggestion
remaining
 steady in the both
year
.
To begin
 with. In the 2000 and 2010, number of percentage of
student
Suggestion
students
 who speak Spanish was higher than any other
language
 by 30%
,
Accept space
,
and 35% respectively.
However
, the
student
 who
speak
Suggestion
speaks
 german is constant by 10%. Meanwhile, the
student
 who
speak
Suggestion
speaks
 french is
exceed
Suggestion
exceeded
 in 2010 by 20% compared to the
year
 of 2000 in which it was only 15%. In 2010, there was no
student
 found who speak another
language
 than French
,
Accept space
,
 German, Spanish or two other languages, While 15% of
student
Suggestion
students
the student
 can speak two other languages in 2010 which was
decline
Suggestion
declined
 by 10% in 2000. The percentage of
student
Suggestion
students
 who speak no other
language
 than
english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
 had experienced downward trend, it was 20% in 2000 which went down to 10% only in the
year
 of 2010.

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