Young people are often influenced by others in the same age in their behaviour and situations. This is called "peer group pressure". Do the disadvantages outweigh the advantages?

The association of people is necessary to create a constructive and civilized
society
. Without association and company of
same
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the same age group
age
group
, the
society
cannot
longer
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long
survive. The best learning and the highest goal are only achieved by
peer
group
pressure
.
Hence
, I strongly believe that
merits
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the merits
of
peer
group
pressure
outweigh its demerits.
First
of all, it is very beneficial for the
society
development to keep in touch with good peoples. Younger people are generally influenced by
behavior
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the behaviour
behaviour
of people of
same
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the same age group
age
group
.
Peer
group
pressure
increase motivation, competition and dedication in the persons which is very good for the development of
society
. It
also
improves interpersonal skills and communication skills in the persons, which results in
development
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the development
of
overall personality
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the overall personality
of a citizen. Without
this
, a person will be isolated and go
in
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into
depression.
In addition
to
this
, by working with
group
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a group
groups
of people, a person will come to know about team spirit, in which citizens will express new ideas, thoughts and share feeling with the people of
same
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the same age group
age
group
.
Also
, the best goals
are always achieve
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are always achieved
are always to achieve
are always achieving
have always achieved
in the
peer
group
pressure
. World biggest achievements are in the company of
same
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the same age group
age
group
.
For instance
, in a survey, the students of various universities are enrolled in the field of technology, by only developing their skills in
peer
group
pressure
.
Thus
, without
this
, a person cannot live successful in the
society
. All in all it is concluded that
peer
group
pressure
is
play
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playing
a very important role in our
life but
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lives, but
lives but
only if we come in contact with
good people
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the good people
of
same
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the same age group
age
group
because by contacting with bad people, we only encourage towards bad
habits so if
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habits, so if
we want to make our future
bright
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brighter
than only method is to live in the
society
of good people of
same
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the same age group
age
group
.
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