The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.
The chart shows the number of men and women in
further
education
in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.
In 1970/71, part-time education
of male
has Fix the agreement mistake
males
markedly
bigger value than Add an article
a markedly
female
. Men have 1 million Fix the agreement mistake
females
part time
participants in that year, but Add a hyphen
part-time
on the other
hand
women have between 600 and 800 Add a comma
,hand
thousands
Change to singular
thousand
part-time
Add the comma(s)
,part-time
education
participants. There is also
difference
between men and women in Add an article
a difference
the difference
full time
Add a hyphen
full-time
education
participants, but there is no considerably
difference between them.
Full-time Change the adverb
considerable
education
rises slightly into
other years which is 1980/81 and 1990/91, but there is still Change preposition
in
markedly
difference between part-time Correct article usage
a markedly
education
and full-time education
for male and female.
Part-time education
changes fluctuated in males but on the other hand
, female
has a Add an article
the female
a female
markedly
increase Change the adverb
marked
of
part-time Change preposition
in
education
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