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The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.
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The chart shows the number of men and women in
further
education
 in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. In 1970/71, part-time
education
 of
male
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males
show examples
 has
markedly
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a markedly
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 bigger value than
female
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females
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. Men have 1 million
part time
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part-time
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 participants in that year, but
on the other
hand
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,hand
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 women have between 600 and 800
thousands
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thousand
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part-time
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,part-time
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education
 participants. There is
also
difference
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a difference
the difference
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 between men and women in
full time
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full-time
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education
 participants, but there is no
considerably
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considerable
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 difference between them. Full-time
education
 rises slightly
into
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in
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 other years which is 1980/81 and 1990/91, but there is still
markedly
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a markedly
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 difference between part-time
education
 and full-time
education
 for male and female. Part-time
education
 changes fluctuated in males but
on the other hand
,
female
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the female
a female
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 has a
markedly
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marked
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 increase
of
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in
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 part-time
education
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 94%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
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