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the graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a european country between 1979 and 2004. summarise the infomrations by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

the graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a european country between 1979 and 2004. summarise the infomrations by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
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As we can see
by
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 the graph , a study between 1979 and 2004 was made in order to report
the
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fish and
meat
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consumption
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 in a European country. In relation to the variations
of
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consumption
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 during the years , the graph
shown
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 that
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fish
consumption
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 is more or less the same in all these years
whereas
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the
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meat
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consumption
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 has significantly changed.
Firstly
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although
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chicken is the kind of
meat
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 which has the lowest record in 1979, as revealed by the image during the research period his
consumption
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 had grown a lot , raising the highest level around 2002 among the other kinds of
meat
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. In the same way ,
the
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beef and
the
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lamb had been characterized by
high
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a high
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level
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levels
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 of
consumption
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 in 1979 which
has
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decreased during the years. In 2004 the lamb’s level of
consumption
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 is almost the same
of
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 the fish
one
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words meat, consumption with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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