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Modern forms of communication such as email an messaginh have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends.This has had a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There's no doubt
that increasing of
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that increasing
 technology has transformed people's communication, so that people can contact via email or messaging. Even though people think that contemporary
t
Kind
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The kind
A kind
 of communication has
abbrivated
 the
time which
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time, which
 people spend seeing their friends. Should we look at back we can see that people communicated by phone or letter,
however it
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however, it
 wasn'
t
 comfortable and reasonable for them, even if they, it took a lot of time. Nowadays people utilize
new current form
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a new current form
the new current form
new current forms
 of communication, because it's more convenient and affordable.Everyone can send messages, photos
,
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,
videos to their friends, despite the fact that their friends are staying more remote place than
them
people in general
they
.
For
instance I
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instance, I
 have a friend who studies abroad.I can speak with him whenever I want and
also
 we can see our faces very nearly. Because of mass
medias I still
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media, I still
media I still
 keep in touch with him.In the past
this
 wasn'
t
 possible, you couldn'
t
 speak more with your parents or
soulmates
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soul mates
. To deduce, I entirely disagree with the statement that was given in the question and definitely believe that modern communications have greatly increased people's social lives

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