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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction.Do you aggree or disaggree.

#salary #job #satisfaction #aggree #disaggree
It is often seen that people are confused whether to choose the big
salary
 or
job
 satisfaction. The pressure of living a quality
life
 given by the society is leading people to run after
big
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a bigger salary
bigger salary
salary
 rather than
job
 satisfaction.
Howeve
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However
, I disagree with the myth that
job
satisfacion
the contentment one feels when one has fulfilled a desire, need, or expectation
satisfaction
 is not important in front of big
salary
. People who
are satisfy
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are satisfied
 with their
job
, automatically tries to give their best rather than taking their work as
burden
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a burden
. If people love what they are doing, no one has to force them or supervise them to complete their
assingments
a duty that you are assigned to perform (especially in the armed forces)
assignments
. They will perform their work on their own and with extreme interest. The
enthusiam
a feeling of excitement
enthusiasm
 they show will automatically increase the growth and productivity of the following institute.
Secondly
, being happy
profecionally
in a professional manner
professionally
 will make you live a happy personal
life
 as well.
On the other hand
, people who choose a particular
job
 just because they are offering a huge amount of wages, sooner or later will realize and find it difficult to stay motivated. The lack of interest and tiring day will
results
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result
 in making more errors and taking extra time to complete the project.
The long
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Longer
 unsatisfied hours will ultimately affect their health and family
life
. People usually run after the big fat
salary
 without even thinking about the pressure that comes with the whopping
amout
a quantity of money
amount
. In my opinion, Satisfying
job
 may not always offer the big amount at the beginning, but with the passing time, the worker's dedication and will of working hard will
definately
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
 give a reason for him/her to never stop. In conclusion,
job
 satisfaction is certainly more
inmortant
 to live a
stressfree
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stress free
 and happy
life
.

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