Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages.

There is a constant debate among people nowadays on where do to draw the line on social media platforms. Some believe that sharing
perosnal
concerning or affecting a particular person or his or her private life and personality
personal
information does not pose any serious risks and has many advantages while others argue that social media is a minefield that needs to be navigated with dexterity. Both views are valid, and in
this
essay I will discuss both opinions and conclude with my own
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First
, social media outlets have become a hub for building million dollar businesses;
moreover
, the lure of the former is that it allows anyone to pursue his/her chance for success. The advent of "
influencers
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influences
" and "You Tube" celebrities has created a golden
opprtunity
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunity
opportunities
for marketing, sales, and services promotion.
Thus
, individuals resorted to sharing every single detail of their daily life in order to engage with more people and increase the their
followers
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follower
numbers which automatically means a higher chance of success. One example of the advantages of sharing personal details on social media is the famous Canadian singer Justin
Bieber who
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Bieber, who
started posting small videos of himself singing at home; he later became an international success after
aquiring
the act of acquiring something
acquiring
a vast amount of followers on his
You Tube
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YouTube
channel.
However
, exposing oneself to literally millions of strangers does carry its own risks; the main one being safety both physical and mental. Stalkers are a real threat and
publicaly
in a manner accessible to or observable by the public; openly
publicly
revealing personal feelings for all to watch is akin to an open invitation for them to follow the target beyond the virtual space of the internet.
Last
year, a famous twenty - two year old Russian Instagram model was killed by a follower who became
obssessed
having or showing excessive or compulsive concern with something
obsessed
with her. Another disadvantage of public social media accounts is the pressure it exerts on the mental
health especially
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health, especially
when gaining more followers and more likes
blurrs
a hazy or indistinct representation
blurs
the line between what should be posted online and what should be kept private. Studies have repeatedly shown that getting few likes or followers can promote low self -esteem; the negative side of sharing more personal details in order to gain more
validiation
the act of validating; finding or testing the truth of something
validation
has become so grave that Instagram has officially announced that It will be cancelling the number of likes on each post! In conclusion, there are advantages and
disadvanages
the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position
disadvantages
to using social media platforms for sharing one's private life. Different outlets have gone beyond their original purpose to just post social
tidbits
and evolved into business opportunities waiting to materialize
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However
,
this
exposure comes at a great price at one's both physical and mental health which in my opinion outweighs whatever advantages exposing personal details might bring to the table.

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