Rising university fees and scarce employment prospects for graduates have led some people to say that universities should not teach arts subjects,like philsophy and history and only offer practical degree courses that maximise chance of employment to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued by

few people

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a few people

the few people

that universities should only focus on practical subject courses, due to limited job opportunities and expensive tertiary education. I partially agree to

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a message that is stated or declared; a communication (oral or written) setting forth particulars or facts etc

statement

, which

refers to the speaker or writer

will explain in following paragraphs. To start with, in

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contemporary world

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as the population is on

rise

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the rise

, there are fewer places left for graduates.Every sector witness unemployment as there are

myraid

too numerous to be counted

myriad

of candidates applying for

particular position

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a particular position

particular positions

the particular position

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studying pragmatic subjects,

such

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as accountancy, management or

financial is

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financial, is

proactive step to secure

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future

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the future

a future

. To exemplify

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lot

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lots

a lot

of students are motivated to pursue commerce to make sure they

wont

will not

won't

be jobless in

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future

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the future

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sector is

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rise to accommodate ever increasing candidates.

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, certain degree's like philosophy and history have no relevancy in

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technological advanced world. These subjects are reduced to books only, can not be applied to the real world.

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pragmatic degree course

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the pragmatic degree course

provides

benifits

financial assistance in time of need

benefits

near

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the near future

future

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arts courses can help in better decision in life.

philosophy

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Philosophy

renders better analytical skills which

helps

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help

a person to take right steps before commencing.

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likewise

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Likewise

, history

teach

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teaches

us about our previous

generation

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generation, such

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as about work patterns and their modification throughout

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the decades

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these subjects improve writing

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skills to

furthur

to or at a greater extent or degree or a more advanced stage ('further' is used more often than 'farther' in this abstract sense)

further

increase chance of acquiring

job

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a job

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lot

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a lot

of companies hire people on the bases of their analytical and language ability to communicate better and taking

right decision

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the right decision

in given circumstances. To conclude

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while practical degree's are relevant to

future

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requirments

required activity

requirements

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learning arts enhances

inter-personal

occurring among or involving several people

interpersonal

skills.

both

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Both

subjects are crucial

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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245 words

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Please outline your plans and strategies for actively participating in local and international communities throughout the IISMA program, and provide some concrete examples.

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