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In many parts of the world, water sources are becoming more polluted what are the effects of this problem? what can be done to combat it?

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Water
 sources are an indispensable part of every
indiviual's
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individual's
life
, nobody can sustain without
water
.
nowadays
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Nowadays
,
majority
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the majority
 of developing nations
are confornting
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are confronted
are confronting
 with the problem of declining quality of
water
. In
this
 essay
,
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,
cosequences
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
consequences
 of impure
water
 and measures to overcome
this
issue
 will be demonstrated in subsequent paragraphs.
First
 and foremost,
primary reaction
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the primary reaction
of
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to
this
 problem is that it would be hazardous for marine
life
.
Palethora
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Plethora
 of aquatic creatures
are
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is
 unable to survive under unsafe
water
 resources.
As a result
life
 of some oceanic animals is on verge of
extinsion
no longer active; extinguished
extinction
.
Moreover
, contaminated
water
 is equally harmful for human
life
 too due to the lack of pure
water
, people
nned
require as useful, just, or proper
need
 to cope with
distict
(often followed by 'from') not alike; different in nature or quality
distinct
 ailments.
For Instance
, mosquitoes are easily attracted by dirty
water which
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water, which
 become the biggest cause
for
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of
illness
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illness, therefore
therefore
, diseases like malaria, dengue and food
posining
the physiological state produced by a poison or other toxic substance
poisoning
 is
quit
to a degree (not used with a negative)
quite
 common. Even polluted
water
 is
also
reasponsible
worthy of or requiring responsibility or trust; or held accountable
responsible
 for
disturbing cultivation
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the disturbing cultivation
 of specific region.
consequently
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Consequently
,
this
 is becoming a major
challange
take exception to
challenge
 for human health because absence of good nutrients will give adverse
affect
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effect
 on persons well being. The most practical solution to
this
issue
 is the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 should sponsor awareness campaigns. An effective advertising could warn people
aboung
in contact with, on top of
upon
abound
danger
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the danger
 of poor
water
 resources and hopefully, it would motivate public to protect their resources from unnatural human activities because, great part of
water
 resources have
distroyed
spoiled or ruined or demolished
destroyed
 by humans only.
Industrilisation
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Industrialisation
Industrialization
 is taking higher participation
to
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in
this
issue
. Significant knowledge of
problem
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the problem
 would lead many people to take
pro
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a pro
-active
procautions
a precautionary measure warding off impending danger or damage or injury etc.
precautions
 to keep
water
 resources clean.
For example
,
Indian goverment
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the Indian government
Indian government
 has established
number
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a number
 of sanitation schemes to promote the issues of
water
 regions and people are taking
great involvement
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a greater involvement
greater involvement
 in these programs
this
 resulted, slight decrease in
water
effulents
water mixed with waste matter
effluents
 in the society. In conclusion, it is evidently proven that society is awfully influenced by unsafe
water
 parts. Now, it is a high time to take some stringent steps to keep world's
water
 resources
to
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in
safe
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a safe
.
Otherwise it
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Otherwise, it
 will demolish the future development of
earth
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the earth
. Everyone needs to do work as a team to eliminate
this
issue
 from society.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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