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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #climate #change
Among most of us assume that we have to live with climate changes rather than avoiding it. In my opinion, we cannot hide from the unexpected changes by nature. As our world grows, new technologies emerge
everyday
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every day
, we heard about new innovations. It's great that we are evolving, but is it only we are evolving? No,
environment
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the environment
 is
also
 evolving with us because of pollution, technologies and so on. It's hard for a person to leave his country because of
weather
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the weather
, if the money he have is not sufficient enough to make him able to stay in some new region. It's hard for a person to leave his homeland, so many people
does not seem
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do not seem
 like the idea of leaving everything behind. Like, in our country summer becomes unbearable and extremely hot. But from the population of 100% only 10% would be able to eliminate
this
,
rest
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the rest
 of them need to live with it.
Although
 it's hard to survive in an abrupt change of an atmosphere around
us but
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us, but
 thanks to
technology we
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technology, we
 find the enormous amount of solutions to beat
this
. In hotter
countries people
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countries, people
 often work at night and in colder countries people work at noon. They often use Air-conditioners and heaters according to their needs. People always find solutions to make their life more comfortable. To conclude, it's not essential for one to turn over because of
climate but
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climate, but
 to adapt, is the key to grow more. Because change does not always guarantees a liveable environment, sometimes it
bring
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brings
 more worse than betterment.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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