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The charts below show the proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other language in addition to English in 2000 and 2010

The charts below show the proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other language in addition to English in 2000 and 2010
#show #proportion #british #students #university #england #language #addition #english
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demonstrates
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 the
percentage
 of
british
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British
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students
 at the
tertiaryin
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tertiary
England where
for
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speaking
other
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another
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language
 were more
convinent
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convenient
 in
comparision
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comparison
 with
english
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English
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 in the year 2000 and 2010.
overall
, it can be seen the proportion of British
students
 were more
famaliour
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familiar
 to speak Spanish in both
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years .
whereas
,the least spoken
language
 was German. there were six different
vernacular
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vernaculars
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 used by the university
students
. Travelling in detail we can observe that, the highest
percentage
 of speaking dialect was of
Spanish
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the Spanish
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language
on
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in
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 both the years with the ratio of 30 and 35 but,the lowest proportion was of many.
German
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language
 was the least spoken with
the
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a
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 ratio of 10 in both
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years. French
tounge
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tongue
 had a decreased
percentage
 from 15 to 10
while
, the two other
language
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languages
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 was spoken
in
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at
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a
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an
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 increased rate from 10 to 15
percentage
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. There were
also
 few British
students
spaking
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speaking
 only their mother
toungue
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tongue
 with
the
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a
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decreased
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 in ratio from 20 ta 10 in
this
 period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, students, language with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bilingualism
  • multilingual
  • language proficiency
  • secondary language
  • language diversity
  • globalization
  • educational policies
  • international communication
  • curriculum
  • proportion
  • increase/decrease
  • predominant language
  • communicative competence
  • linguistic skills
  • bar charts
  • data comparison
  • cultural exchange
  • foreign language acquisition
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