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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of experts in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of experts in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The diagram illustrates many diverse types
from
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 a valuable
export
 of a country in 2015 and 2016
According to
 the given information,
export
 earnings from Petroleum products
both
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 the highest in both
year
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years
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 2015 and 2016.
In contrast
, Textiles still held the lowest proportion among the categories. It is noticeable that in 2015, Petroleum products had
a
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high
export
 earnings, around 60
billion
, and keep rising to 3
percentage
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 in 2016. Meanwhile, the
amount
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 of
export
 earnings from engineered goods grew up by 8.5%, from approximately 58
billion
 to 61
billion
 in 2016, which was almost the same level as Petroleum
product
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products
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.
Export
 revenue from
textlies
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textiles
 grew from roughly 25
billion
 to just over 30
billion
 which increased
15.24
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% from 2015 to 2016.
In addition
, there
were
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no
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not
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 much
changing
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change
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for
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 income from Agricultural products, around 31
billion
.
Lastly
, 5.15%
were
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was
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 a drop from Gem and
jewelry
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jewellery
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, where its income
reduced
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was reduced
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nearly
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by nearly
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 40
billion
 in 2016.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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