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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of experts in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of experts in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The bar chart and table give information about a country's
export
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earnings
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 from five groups of
products
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 in 2015 and 2016. It is noticeable that
export
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 revenues in all but one of the five product categories increased over the period shown.
While
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 petroleum
products
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 were the
highest earning
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 exports in both years, the textile industry saw the most significant growth in
earnings
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.
Export
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earnings
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 from petroleum
products
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 rose from around $61
billion
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 in 2015 to $63
billion
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 in 2016, which was an increase of 3%. Income from engineered goods reached a similar level. The country’s
export
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earnings
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 from these goods went up by 8.5% to approximately $62
billion
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 in 2016. From 2015 to 2016, there was a 15.24% increase in
export
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 revenue from textiles, with
earnings
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 rising from roughly $25
billion
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 to over $30
billion
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.
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, there was almost no change in the amount of money earned from agricultural
products
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, which remained at just over $30
billion
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.
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, the only decline in income occurred in the gems and jewellery product group, where
export
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earnings
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 fell by around 5% to approximately $40
billion
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 in 2016.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words export, earnings, products, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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