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International tourism has brought enormous benefits to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#tourism #places #time #concern #impact #inhabitants #environment
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Nowadays
tourism
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business
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 is at its peak in many countries in the globe.
Tourism
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 plays pivotal role in the economic growth of any
country
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 which promotes its landmarks to visit. There are many countries in the world whose source of income primarily depends upon
tourism
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.
i
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I
.
e
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E
: Switzerland, Malaysia, Thailand, Kingdom of Saudia Arabia
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
 etc. I would strongly disagree with the viewpoint that cons of international
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is
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are
 far more than its pros.
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,
tourism
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 gets the
business
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 within a
country
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 when a government of any
country
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 promotes its
tourism
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.
Tourism
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 promotes trade, which is directly beneficial for the economy of that
country
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.
Secondly
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, through
tourism
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business
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, hotel & motel industry expands. With that industry, many people who are directly associated
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with
hotel industry
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the hotel industry
 avail the advantage to be in the employment category.
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, with the
tourism
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business
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, transportation
business
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 within a
country
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 booms as well. Tourists need transportation to roam around the places (which is a basic necessity of the specific
business
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). Without a proper
infrastructure international
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infrastructure, international
tourism
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 cannot be
promote
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promoted
. So, it pushes all
sort
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sorts
 of transportation medium as well within a
country
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. As far as the environment is
concern
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concerned
,
then
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 a government should legitimate
such
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 policies for
this
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business
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 which protects the environment of that
country
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.
For instance
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, a government can penalize tourist by banning in the
country
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 for lifetime if one breech any law.
This
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 threat can protect the resources as well as environment of that
country
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.
Last
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 year I was in
Kingdom
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the Kingdom
 of Saudia Arabia for a religious affair and there I found out that they do the same with
culprits
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the culprits
. In
nutshell
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a nutshell
, businesses are always at
risk but
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risk, but
 economic growth and stability should be the points which a
country
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 needs to consider. As gain is always sweeter than pain.
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