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When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration for many. Others, however, prefer different other aspects of a job over the salary they earn. In your opinion what are the most important aspects of a job?

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It must
conceded
Suggestion
concede
 that, many people consider that the
salary
 of a
job
 is the most important factor while the
salary
 is not as significant as other factors for others
.
Accept space
.
 In my opinion other factors as equally important to get a
job
. On the one hand, money is necessary in order to prepare their basic needs;
for example
, we need to pay our bills for housing, transportation, food, health and education. It is obvious that,
more money
Suggestion
the more money
 you can earn makes you more facilities in your life so people prefer to get a steady
job
 with a comprehensive income to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their dreams;
Moreover
,
high
Suggestion
higher
 income
increase
Suggestion
increases
 your comfort and support for your family.
On the other hand
, other considerations are as important as
salary
 earned in your
job
.
Firstly
, the work environment has a significant impact on enhancing one’s
job
 satisfaction;
for instance
, if you work in the uncomfortable place with unfriendly
coworker
an associate that one works with
co-workers
, has a knock-on effect on your level of happiness and your satisfaction in your work place.
Secondly
, personal achievements play an essential role in some people’s life. Some people passionate about learning new skills or making promotion to attain more social respect;
in addition
, their desires make them
job
 satisfaction so high
salary
 without any personal achievements make them disappointed and tired in the long term.
Finally
, some people choose a career because they want to help other people in the society
such
 as working in humanitarian activities and various charities to satisfy themselves. To sum up, not only is
salary
 important aspect of a
job but
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job, but
also
 other measures should be taken into account to choose a
job
.

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