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• Many countries raise fuel prices in order to deal successfully with problems pertaining to traffic and pollution. What effects do you think this move can have? What other measures do you think can be taken to reduce traffic and pollution?

#countries #fuel #prices #traffic #pollution #effects #move #measures
Traffic
congestion
 and air
pollution
 are interrelated problems and a lot of countries are grappling with these problems in various ways. Some of their solutions have been effective while others have been counterproductive.  One of the common measures is
increase
Suggestion
increasing
 in
fuel
 process. Though it is believed that
rise
Suggestion
the rise
 in
fuel
 prices can discourage people from using automobiles, it rarely does so.
Instead
,
rise
 in
fuel
 prices has some undesirable repercussions. The most challenging of them is
increase
Suggestion
increasing
 in prices of most of the things we need daily, which causes dearness.
As a result
, provisions for daily life become out of reach for common people and even access to hygienic drinking water becomes a luxury.
However
, there are very few instances where
rise
Suggestion
the rise
a rise
 in
fuel
 prices contributes to decrease in
pollution
 and
traffic
congestion
.  I am of the opinion that apart from
hike
Suggestion
a hike
the hike
 in
fuel
 prices there are some other ways of controlling
traffic
congestion
 and
pollution
. The most effective solutions to
traffic
congestion
 include better infrastructure and
traffic
 education. If a town has broad roads and a good number of flyovers, there will be no
traffic
congestion
.
Besides
, if people have better civic and
traffic
 senses, they will not park their vehicles on busy roads and
as a result
 the problem of
traffic
congestion
 will be solved to a great extent.  As far as the problem of
pollution
 is concerned, I believe that raising
fuel
 prices is ineffective in curbing
pollution
.
However
, there are other more effective measures we can take to control
pollution
.
First
, we can make the young generation aware of how our modern
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
 is responsible for ecological disaster and what we can do to save our environment.
Besides
, we can enforce strict rules regarding
pollution
 and make sure nobody should be able to harm our environment with impunity.
Last
 but not least, a vehicle should not be allowed on the road if it is too old and emits a lot of
fume
Suggestion
fumes
 or makes a raucous din.  To sum up, contrary to our belief a
rise
 in
fuel
 prices turns out to be counterproductive and
therefore
 we must conceive some other effective ways of solving the problems of
traffic
congestion
 and
pollution
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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