Many Children are encouraged by their parents to get a part time job in their free time. what are the advantages and disadvantages to children of doing so?

It is true fact that/ it is irrefutable fact that
significant number
Suggestion
a significant number
significant numbers
of parents advised their children to do part
time
job
in their leisure
time
.
Although
, many may see is as positive phenomena, it is not
trend
Suggestion
trending
without drawbacks. Both the merits and demerits will be discussed before a reasonable conclusion is reached. The
first
and foremost advantage is that if they work hard to earn their own
money they
Accept comma addition
money, they
learn the
imprtantance
the quality of being important and worthy of note
importance
and value of money.
which
Suggestion
Which
helps them to learn how to spend and where to spend?
Moreover
, it helps them to manage their account in
future
Suggestion
the future
.
Second advantage
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The second advantage
is that part
time
job
is
best way
Suggestion
the best way
the make them busy in their free
time
so that they spend whole vacant
time
in learning
someting
an unspecified thing, agency, amount, etc.
something
new at
job
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the job
.Nowadays
,
Accept space
,
young mind
mostly spend
Suggestion
mostly spends
their free
time
in using social media, watching
imaproprate
not suitable for a particular occasion etc
inappropriate
videos, many of them start taking
harmfull
causing or capable of causing harm
harmful
drugs which
effects
Suggestion
affect
affects
their physical Growth. Playing
harmfull
causing or capable of causing harm
harmful
games like
pubg
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pub
pubs
, which is dangerous for
brain
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the brain
and eyes. In 2018 India did a
survay
consider in a comprehensive way
survey
in which they compared the physical growth of children who use to play more computer games with who do not and results
shown
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showed
82% of
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
who are addicted to games are mentally weak.
Moreover
,
Accept space
,
they get
chance
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a chance
the chance
to work with skilled
proffessionals
engaged in a profession or engaging in as a profession or means of livelihood
professionals
professional
professions
and learn moral values,
puncutality
the quality or habit of adhering to an appointed time
punctuality
,
Accept space
,
time
management and many important values which help them in future.
On the other hand
Inspiring
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
for
short
Suggestion
a short time job
short time jobs
the short time job
time
job
in their leisure
time
also
have some negative aspects as it may
effects
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affect
affects
their physical as well as mental growth. They do study for long hours in school and after
they
objective case of they
them
doing
job
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the job
a job
may become a
hetic
marked by intense agitation or emotion
hectic
hi-tech
high-tech
schedule which
effects
have an effect upon
affects
their health. They must have
time
to play and spend with peers.
beside
Suggestion
Beside
this
,
Accept space
,
spending whole the day away from
family
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the family
may
effect
have an effect upon
affect
their heritage values. After
analyzing
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analysing
both the views I am of the opinion that Motivating
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
to make them busy is good it will save them from bad
habbits
an established custom
habits
habit
but part
time
job
is not
good idea
Suggestion
a good idea
.
Parent
Suggestion
A parent
The parent
ask
Suggestion
asks
them to help them in their work rather than asking for
job
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a job
the job
jobs
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
that they will spend
time
with parents, and
also
get
time
to play with peers.

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