Many Children are encouraged by their parents to get a part time job in their free time. what are the advantages and disadvantages to children of doing so?

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a significant number

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in learning

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mostly spends

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in using social media, watching

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management and many important values which help them in future.

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both the views I am of the opinion that Motivating

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to play with peers.

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Many Children are encouraged by their parents to get a part time job in their free time. what are the advantages and disadvantages to children of doing so?

Fully explain your ideas

In the future, all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

Robots and artificial intelligence are being developed to replace humans in the workplace. Why is this happening? Do you think this will have a positive or negative impact on society?

In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single –sex schools have disadvantages later in life.