some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Needless to say, many people believe that working for the same working place is
favorable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
for them,
however others
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however, others
tend to work for various companies and alter their jobs. I will discuss both views follow by my own opinion as well. Some people prefer working for the same organization due to getting used to that environment. They know the specific tasks and their responsibilities during the years that they passed. Having a nice relationship with colleagues and benefiting from useful facilities for old members of
company
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the company
a company
are the merits that those people often consider. By passing long hours in their working place, they get used to
work
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working
ambiance and leaving
this
situation is literally hard. As we know. “
old
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Old
habit
die
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dies
hard”. While others tend to change their jobs permanently. For getting rid of the monotony of working in a fixed work environment gives them pleasure to search for different job opportunities. They want to enjoy getting acquainted with new people and jobs, so they accept all the consequences of not having a fixed-job. They are not worried about getting promotion that a permanent job may
bring and
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bring, and
they just enjoy working in different positions. These individuals develop the idea that “every person needs a change” in themselves.
Besides
, having interaction with new friends will lead to ameliorate social communication. To sum up, despite all the hardships of changing working place, my view is that the tendency to change is in human instinct and sometimes these changes may bring useful outcomes.

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