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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
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The data sources clearly communicate the amount of
electricity
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 generated and utilized by the 10 highest-ranking countries in 2014. It is patently obvious that China was more prominent than the remaining states in terms of both
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 output and demand, followed closely by the United States.
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, Germany was the only nation in which
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 consumption exceeded production. As for China,
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 country was the world’s leading
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 energy generator, which was over 1299
kWh
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 higher than that of the US. In comparison with
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 provision, the use was lower by a small disparity, roughly 76
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 with China and 233
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 with the USA, respectively. Regarding the remaining countries, there was a similarity between the quantity of
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 produced
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 expended in Russia, approximately 1000
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. Following by the power consumption of Japan and India, around 856.7
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 and about 698.8
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turn. Canada, France, Brazil, Germany, and the Republic of Korea consumed less than 500
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 of
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, with the Republic of Korea
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 the least utilization of 449.5
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. The supply of power in all states was greater than the consumption except in Germany, which manufactured 526.6
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 and used 582.5
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • electricity grid
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • power generation
  • industrial demand
  • residential use
  • transmission losses
  • energy imports
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy policy
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • demand and supply
  • electrification
  • energy security
  • grid reliability
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