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Nowadays, people make new friends using social media and internet chat groups. Some of them believes that is good. Other people thinks that face-to-face conversation is beneficial. Discuss both sides.

#people #friends #media #internet #chat #groups #conversation
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In the era of information technology, we all are using several devices like mobile, tablet, laptop
,
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TV to fulfil different purposes.
However
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, within
this
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 long usage period, we
also
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 communicate with different people for different causes. To make
this
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 natural intention of human to communicate with other humans, different types of social medium and
internet
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chat
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 group were established. More and more we are becoming dependent on
such
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 online communication, more the debate regarding the issue arises whether making new friends online is better than face-to-face communication.
Firstly
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, we cannot deny the fact that we all are highly dependent on
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Internet
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the Internet
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Facebook
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google. So, we cannot ignore using the blessings for our help. Nowadays, with the use of social media and
internet
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chat
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 groups we can easily meet new people with
same interest
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the same interest
 of us which would be difficult without it.
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, using social media people from distant places can easily interact with each other and get familiar with another. In short, social media and
internet
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chat
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 groups help people to make friends
in
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with
 different regions, cultures, backgrounds.
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, most of people have different ideas regarding the issue as they believe that to make new friends, we should communicate with people face to face rather than through social media and
internet
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chat
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 groups. Mostly the claim comes from different unfavourable events where people were victimised and faced different scams and frauds.
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, friendship should be based on trust from both
sides but
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sides, but
 in social media and
internet
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chat
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 group people tend to be ostentatious which kills the trust issues right from the root.
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, most of the friendships
inititiated
bring into being
initiated
 in social media and
internet
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chat
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 groups end up with failure.
On the other hand
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, in face-to-face
communication there
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communication, there
 is no scope to hide any truth which makes it go forward with natural flow and based on trust. In the circumstances above, we can not give verdict to the
favor
promote over another
favour
 of just one side as both online and offline exchange becomes existential part of our day to day
life but
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life, but
 we can demand sensible usage of online relations which may make it quite
phenomenal way
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a phenomenal way
 of making amazing friends.
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