Nowadays people make new friends through social networks and internet chat groups. Some people think this is good. Others think face-to-face interaction is essential. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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With the advent of Information Technology
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communication has seen
conspicuos difference
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a conspicuous difference
conspicuous difference
and social networking has become widely popular.It has gained popularity not only among
teens but
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teens, but
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among
older generation
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the older generation
older generations
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Although
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through social networking it is possible to connect with the people from diverse culture I think face to face meet ups are important.I will be discussing both the sides and lend my support for the latter
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There are numerous social networking sites encompassing twitter
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facebook
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Facebook
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instagram
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which are widely these days.
Increase
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An increase
in the number of virtual friends helps in online business which people
find
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are finding
more convenient now a days.It is possible to share and communicate ideas among people sharing common interests
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There are many real life examples where people find their life partners through these sites.
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However there
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However, there
are many hidden dangers in establishing relationship through these sites.Often the people on the other side need not be communicating for the same reason as you are thinking.
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First they
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First, they
gain your trust and gradually ask to share your personal information and other details.Once they realise you have fallen for
them they
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them, they
misuse those
informations
a message received and understood
information
and ask for money or result in sexual exploitation. Most of these online friends would be disguised as someone people
generally gets
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generally get
attracted.These issues would often make the victim depressed and even results in suicide if not addressed immediately. Albeit there are many advantages of making friends across
globe
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the globe
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its disadvantages outweigh them.We should be wary while interacting with online friends and should not share any personal
informations
a message received and understood
information
with them.
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Also we
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Also, we
should educate
younger generation
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younger generations
the younger generation
about the consequences. Conversing over a meal is more healthy and refreshing than virtual communication.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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