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You live near a university and would like to earn some extra money by renting a room in your apartment to a student. Write a letter to the university housing office. In your letter, • introduce yourself • explain why your apartment would be a good living place for a student • describe the room you have for rent

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I would like you to know that, I am planning to share my
apartment
 with a student. I am
single
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 full-time working man, wants to share a
room
 which is favourable among the students. I am a Mechanical
Enineer
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Engineer
 by profession who is very neat and
punchtual
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punctual
. I usually woke up at 6
everyday
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 in the morning and coming back at 8 in the night. I am very keen and joyful
,
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 and living in a dream in
this
 heaven. In order to, I am working full-time, my
apartment
 will be empty half of the day. It has a perfect
ambious
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ambitious
ambient
 for a student. As it is in the most demanding area, it is 7 minutes away from the university and has
the
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grocerry
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grocery
 store in the neighbourhood. The
apartment
 has
gym
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 and swimingpool which is open for all the
teanents
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tenants
tenents
tenets
. The
room
 from the
two
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two-bed
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bed
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bedroom
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room
apartment
,
it
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includes all the
ammenities
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amenities
in
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 just $375 per month. The
room
 has its own bathroom and balcony with
the
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a
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 river view. Please note that the kitchen will be shared. Thanks in advance as it will be gone whoever comes
first
.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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