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Some people say that the government should invest in trains and subway system to prevent traffic congestion in large cities. Others, however, think it should build wider roads. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Transportation
have
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has
 a major
issues
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issue
now a days
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
. The extensive use of transportation has led roads to
traffic
congestion
. A massive number of people consider that the government should provide widespread trains and subway system in order to eliminate the
traffic
congestion
. On
contrary
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the contrary
, other ponder that the road should
be enough wide
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be wide enough
 to get rid of gridlock.
This
 essay will discuss both
sides
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side's
 perceptions. There are manifold points to support the
first
 view. The extension in trains and
subway system
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subway systems
, could be lucrative to restrain the
traffic
congestion
. Many people think that the trains and subway system are
more cheaper
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cheaper
 than their own vehicle and they prefer to travel on trains and buses.
Also
, they emphasis to build the underground trains to get away from the road's gridlock.
As a result
, the roads will get more space free from crowd and
traffic
 would go smoothly.
On
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In
By
 contrast, others have opposite views.
On the other hand
, some people think the road ought to be
expand
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expanded
 enough to overcome the
traffic
 jam. There would be
decline
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declining
 in
traffic
congestion
 if the roads are extensive enough. By
construct
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constructing
 the wider roads, the bridges and the underground roads, the
traffic
 would be smooth enough to get control over the
traffic
congestion
. It would provide more free space for pave and for pedestrian.
Also
, it could reduce the risk of accident on
roads
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the roads
 due to
traffic
congestion
. I am of the opinion that government should build wider roads.
Furthermore
, the should construct more bridges, underground roads to facilitate smooth
traffic
.

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