Nowadays children watch a lot of TV and play video games. However, some people think that these activities are not good for a child's mental health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Recently, some people argued that watching television and playing video
games
are not beneficial to younger generations' mental
well being
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. I completely agree with
this
claim, as these activities promote violence and can deliver a message that
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not suitable
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young audiences.
To begin
with, the advent of televisions and vast options of
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channels
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to watch, are not helping children to achieve optimal mental health.
This
activity is readily available with a single click
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the remote control, which is very detrimental to younger viewers without parental guidance.
In other words
, youngsters can access the wide array of
tv
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TV
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channel
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channels
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which can have scenes that
are
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not
promoting
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good manners and proper conduct that later on they can adapt.
Although
there is a regulating body,
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is responsible
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scrutinizing the episodes that can be watched, we can never
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that all scenes promote a healthy mentality
such
as adultery and crimes.
In addition
, playing video
games
is not suited for children as
this
exposes them to violence and aggression. The available
games
,
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for example
, Contra and Street Fighter are being inspired by battle and power that promotes the principle of 'survival of the fittest" and the weakest link will
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.
This
kind of mentality is dangerous to young generations as they can adapt
this
and apply
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their everyday life. In effect, children can be aggressive in the future and will
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the spirit of camaraderie, and always
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to be the best at the expense of others. In conclusion, I totally believe that watching a lot of
tv
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and playing video
games
are not healthy
to
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child's
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a child's
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mental health because
this
can promote violence and delinquency that can be acquired later on in their lives.

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