Nowadays children watch a lot of TV and play video games. However, some people think that these activities are not good for a child's mental health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Recently, some people argued that watching television and playing video
games
are not beneficial to younger generations' mental well being
. I completely agree with Add a hyphen
well-being
this
claim, as these activities promote violence and can deliver a message that are
not suitable Change the verb form
is
to
young audiences.
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for
To begin
with, the advent of televisions and vast options of channel
to watch, are not helping children to achieve optimal mental health. Fix the agreement mistake
channels
This
activity is readily available with a single click in
the remote control, which is very detrimental to younger viewers without parental guidance. Change preposition
of
In other words
, youngsters can access the wide array of tv
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TV
channel
which can have scenes that Fix the agreement mistake
channels
are
not Verb problem
do
promoting
good manners and proper conduct that later on they can adapt. Wrong verb form
promote
Although
there is a regulating body, who
is responsible Correct pronoun usage
that
in
scrutinizing the episodes that can be watched, we can never Change preposition
for
assure
that all scenes promote a healthy mentality Verb problem
ensure
such
as adultery and crimes.
In addition
, playing video games
is not suited for children as this
exposes them to violence and aggression. The available games
, like
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apply
for example
, Contra and Street Fighter are being inspired by battle and power that promotes the principle of 'survival of the fittest" and the weakest link will be perish
. Change the verb form
perish
This
kind of mentality is dangerous to young generations as they can adapt this
and apply to
their everyday life. In effect, children can be aggressive in the future and will Correct pronoun usage
it to
loss
the spirit of camaraderie, and always Replace the word
lose
aiming
to be the best at the expense of others.
In conclusion, I totally believe that watching a lot of Wrong verb form
aim
tv
and playing video Correct your spelling
TV
games
are not healthy to
Change preposition
for
child's
mental health because Correct article usage
a child's
this
can promote violence and delinquency that can be acquired later on in their lives.Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
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