Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many guardians think that
there
of them or themselves
their
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
should participate in
team
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activities during
there
of them or themselves
their
leisure
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time whereas
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time, whereas
some think that personal activities for their children would
work
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best. According to me both have
there
of them or themselves
their
importance and I will discuss them in
upcoming paragraphs
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the upcoming paragraphs
. In todays busy era people do not get enough
time
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for their
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
,
moreover
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childrens
a young person of either sex
children
are
also
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busy in
there
of them or themselves
their
school
work
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. Due to the busy routine children hardly get
time
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to relax and share their feelings with someone which can lead to
aggresive
having or showing determination and energetic pursuit of your ends
aggressive
behaviour or depression in some
kids
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kids, hence
hence
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group
excersises
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercises
like
oudoor
located, suited for, or taking place in the open air
outdoor
games, group assignment give them
time
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to bond with new people and make new
freinds
a person you know well and regard with affection and trust
friends
which will
further
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help them to be social.
For
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example activities
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example, activities
like swimming in community centre will help wards to know about people living in
there
of them or themselves
their
community.
Secondly
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, Working
in
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with
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team
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the team
a team
teams
in the childhood will prepare
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
for the future, Students will get to know about the
team
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work
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ethics and regulation, He or she can learn about people with
diffrent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
culture and diversity which will
further
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help them in getting
alongwith
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along with
their jobs where they will have to
work
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with their
collegues
an associate that one works with
colleagues
colleges
college
as a whole
team
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.
On the other hand
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working in
sollitude
a state of social isolation
solitude
also
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holds a great
impotance
the quality of being important and worthy of note
importance
as a child can learn to be independent and handle the situation by themselves. If
child
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the child
a child
do
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does
all the stuff by themselves from the start to end they will know how to handle an assignment without anybody's help.
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Moreover by
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Moreover, by
spendinge
the act of spending or disbursing money
spending
time
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with
themselves they
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themselves, they
can learn more about themselves and stay away from the bad
freinds
a person you know well and regard with affection and trust
friends
who can manipulate the kids and can lead to bad
habbits
an established custom
habits
.
for
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For
examlple childrens
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example, children
example childrens
example children
examlple children
get
attarcted
direct toward itself or oneself by means of some psychological power or physical attributes
attracted
to bad
thingd
any movable possession (especially articles of clothing)
things
fast like drugs,
alchol
a liquor or brew containing alcohol as the active agent
alcohol
dure
having or feeling no doubt or uncertainty; confident and assured
sure
door
dare
there
of them or themselves
their
teenage which lead to bad
behivious
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
and study
also
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get disturbed. I opine that kids should
given
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give
freedom to
work
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and enjoy the
team
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activities rather the just
binding
movement that causes the formation of a curve
bending
them to themselves as
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
learn better when they are happy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • occupied
  • organized
  • group activities
  • benefits
  • social
  • teamwork skills
  • interpersonal skills
  • friendship
  • discipline
  • time management
  • interests
  • hobbies
  • independent play
  • creativity
  • problem-solving skills
  • self-reliance
  • explore
  • discover
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