many employers offer their employees gyms,sports club. Others believe that it is unnecessary. discuss both views and give your own opinion .

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reasons
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earns
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employees
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gyms
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great, but
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the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position
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companies
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can't afford to go
gym
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the gym
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sports
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because they lot's of expenses.
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offer
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offers
gyms and sports
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is a sign that
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you're
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the
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the quality of having a superior or more favorable position
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is that you can make your body fit after your
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you can go to
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the gym
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a lot
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of them or themselves
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because of spending time in the gym.
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Offering
gyms and sports
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is
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absolutely essential
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others, but
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • subsidize
  • team-building
  • productivity
  • healthcare costs
  • attractive work environment
  • personal health
  • physical fitness
  • corporate wellness programs
  • occupational progress
  • absenteeism
  • nonintrusive
  • employee benefits
  • work-life balance
  • peer pressure
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