The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel force in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel force in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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of electricity by fuel source in Australia. In 1980 production with
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total of 100
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, coal
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has 50
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and
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productions have 20
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10
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. In 2000 production with
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total of 170
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that takes almost half of it with 130
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,
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construction has 36
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construction
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2
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of electricity by fuel force in France. In 1980 production with
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total of 90
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,
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and natural
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construction have 25
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20
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nuclear power manufacturing
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5
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. In 2000 management with
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total of 180
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nuclear energy with 126
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. Coal and grease manufacturing
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25
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and hydro force creation have 2
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. In conclusion, electricity from the fuel source in Australia doesn't have nuclear energy so that
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more coal
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in France, they focus more on
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energy formulation of 2000
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1980's
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focuses more on coal and grease.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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