The charts show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

The charts show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
The pie charts compare the percentages of British
students
at the particular university who spoke different languages
in addition
to English, in two separate
years
. It is clearly seen that in both
years
, the majority of British
students
studying at the university were able to speak at least one foreign
language
.
Moreover
, it is noticeable that amount of
second
and
third
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language
speakers increased over the
10 year
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period.
To begin
with, in the year 2000, 80% of the
students
were able to speak one or more foreign languages, and 20% only spoke English. After ten
years
, there was a rise of 5% in the proportion
those
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who spoke
second
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foreign
language
. There was
also
an increase from 10% to 15%, in the proportion who were capable to speak two other languages. Looking at the specific
second
language
spoken, in the year 2000, 30% of the
students
could speak Spanish, 15% spoke French, and 10% spoke German. Ten
years
later, the proportion of Spanish speakers grew to 35%, there were 5%
less
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French speakers, and those who spoke German remained stable.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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