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A balanced diet, or eating balanced meals, is the key to a healthy life. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Many people are of the opinion that they could have a healthy
life
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 because of their
diet
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. I partially agree with that point of view,
however
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, in
order
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 to have a healthy
life
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 there are many ways apart from having balanced meals. It is certainly true that eating well plays a major role in keeping healthy. There are many studies show that many diseases relate to eating too much meat and fatty foods
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 as obesity, diabetes, atherosclerosis, heart disease, gout and high blood cholesterol level. People should have more fruits, vegetables and
fiber
a slender and greatly elongated substance capable of being spun into yarn
fibre
 in their meals and have less
foods
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food
 containing fat and high calorie in
order
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 to have a
balance
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balanced
 meal and reduce risk of suffering from diseases related to
diet
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.
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 eating nutritious meals is important, it does not
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necessarily
 meant that people will always have a healthy
life
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. Some people still suffer from various
diseases even
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diseases, even
 though their
diet
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 is very good.
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, people who work in offices easy suffer from cardiovascular disease, degenerative joint, or neurological diseases. These diseases are often associated with lacking of
exercise
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. In
order
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 to have a healthy
life
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 people should not only eat balanced
meals but
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meals, but
also
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 consider combining their
diet
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 with doing regular
exercise
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.
Exercise
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 helps us have toned body, increases blood circulation, and our heart, an important muscle in the body, beats faster. Do
exercise
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also
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 help
body
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the body
 eliminate excess energies which are
causes
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the causes
 of many diseases. To conclude, it is important to combine both having scientific meals and doing regular
exercise
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 in
order
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 to have a long and healthy
life
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Balanced diet
  • Essential nutrients
  • Vitamins and minerals
  • Proteins and fats
  • Chronic diseases
  • Diabetes
  • Heart disease
  • Obesity
  • Mental health
  • Cognitive function
  • Omega-3 fatty acids
  • Healthy weight
  • Calorie intake
  • Overeating
  • Energy levels
  • Physical performance
  • Stronger immune system
  • Illnesses and infections
  • Variety of foods
  • Long-term health
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