Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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are considered

as a special for the other

profession

;

However

, other become to their talents has created controversy.

Although

, many people believe that

this

special skilled people are paid more. I disagree

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with

this

and support that it is appropriate to do so. My opinion and the mention of

other

any of various alternatives; some other

another

profession

that could be discussed

further

. Considering my opinion, the film starts, pop musicians and sports stars are paid for their special talents.

Moreover

, they are mass appeal and huge fan following for his outstanding performance.

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Virat

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is number one best man in the world

also

, all of his

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fans

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come

and to show his match defiantly.

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they

of them or themselves

their

careers have no more predicted futures. In some case they have to not play vary

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then

they futures has

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blinked

. They have no stable income nor a retirement age. So, I support they would be paid more. Referring to

second question

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the second question

, they are several other

profession

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professions

to paid highly. Out of all the

example

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examples

, I suggest that defence, scientist and researchers, doctors, teachers and social worker

should be get

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should get

more money. The reasons each

profession

play critical role in the society. The defence protects, researchers helps to progress, doctors saves life, teachers

create

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creates

civilized literate generation and social worker helps to clean the social vices. To conclude, not only entertainers would be highly paid, but some other

profession

has

more reliable role

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a more reliable role

in the our association to get more money.

Also

, people would be aware of the entire

society knowledge

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society, knowledge

that can help for to support other field has more importance. I believe all

profession

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professions

are of importance in their own manner.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

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Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Fully explain your ideas

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

in many countires nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over tha world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and Clean energy. The benefits of nuclear energy far outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people prefer to travel around town by car, while others prefer public transit such as bus, train, or subway. Discuss both these positions and give your own opinion.