The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
The chart illustrates the export earnings of a nation from different
products
in comparing two years (2015 and 2016),
while
the table describes the
amount
percentage difference in dispatched goods in
mentioned
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period. (The
amount
is stated in American $).
Overall
, after comparing the
products
income in 2
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of
year
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it indicates that the nation received the highest export
amount
from petroleum
products
with the lowest export from
textiles
. Agriculture
products
and
textiles
obtained the same money
in contrast
with other
products
in 2016
while
there is not any similarity between gained values from transferred commodities in 2015. In terms of petroleum
products
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there is a slight difference which demonstrates that the commodity brought the highest
amount
with more than 60 billion dollars in 2016 which there is a 3 % improvement
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to the previous year. There is a significant rise for
textiles
and engineered
products
which respectively reported 15, 24% and 8.15%. Gems and
jewelry
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with agricultural
products
in contrast
with
textiles
and engineered
products
are the traded
merchandises
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with
a
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slight progress which is 5.18% and 0.81%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words products, amount, textiles with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • trend analysis
  • anomalies
  • percentage change
  • sector analysis
  • global demand
  • domestic production
  • economic conditions
  • technological advancements
  • international regulations
  • economic growth
  • trade relations
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