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Should education and healthcare be free of charge and funded by the government, or should it be the responsibility of the people to pay for these services?

#education #healthcare #charge #government #responsibility #people #services
Human beings have needed five basic
need
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needs
 to sustain,
education
 and
health
care
 shear a major part.
Education
 status and availability of
health
care
facility
 denotes the success of a country,
government
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the government
 should make more effective plan to provide
this
 basic need
to
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for
 people. Some people think that individuals should pay all of their expenses for
education
 and
health
, but as far as I am concerned, my personal preference is
government
 should pay all of the cost of
education
 and
health
care
facility
. For a few significant reasons I fill that way, my reasons
goes
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go
 as
follow
Suggestion
follows
.
First
 of all, citizen of any
government
 country should pay their
tax
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taxes
, so they deserve some feedback from the
government
. Educated people and
health
 is one of
the great
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the greatest
 assets of any country, the help our economic development, social improvement. If
government
 should pay all the expenses for
education
 and
health
 it will give a great feedback in
future
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the future
, a huge number of working capable people were available to develop our economic situation and make a sustainable development.
For example
, in Bangladesh educations rate was only 34% before 2000 when
government
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the government
make
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makes
 the primary and secondary
education
 free for all
student
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students
 the number of educated people should increase now it almost
two fold
twice as great or many
twofold
form
a giver or sender
from
 the 2000 level.
Secondly
, technological development
make
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makes
 all think available to
people but
Accept comma addition
people, but
it
it is
it's
 costly, sometime people is not able to bear it. So
government
 needs to make policy to pay all medical help and
health
care
facility
 to the local people. When people should pay their
health
care
 fees they should not able to get better treatment because lack of money and assets. When
government
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the government
 should pay all fees,
then
 an equality situation created in our
society
,
government
 should able to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 all of their plans and
policy
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policies
. In sum, when
government
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the government
 pays all of the expenditure of
education
 and
health
, they can ensure all people get
better
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a better education
education
 and medical
facility
.
However
, when people should pay it creates an imbalance
society
 that will be harmful
for
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to
 our
society
. So
government
 should pay all the expenses to make a sustainable
society
.
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