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Should education and healthcare be free of charge and funded by the government, or should it be the responsibility of the people to pay for these services?

#education #healthcare #charge #government #responsibility #people #services
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Human beings have needed five basic
need
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needs
 to sustain,
education
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 and
health
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care
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 shear a major part.
Education
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 status and availability of
health
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care
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facility
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 denotes the success of a country,
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government
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the government
 should make more effective plan to provide
this
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 basic need
to
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for
 people. Some people think that individuals should pay all of their expenses for
education
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 and
health
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, but as far as I am concerned, my personal preference is
government
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 should pay all of the cost of
education
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 and
health
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care
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facility
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. For a few significant reasons I fill that way, my reasons
goes
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go
 as
follow
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follows
.
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 of all, citizen of any
government
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 country should pay their
tax
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taxes
, so they deserve some feedback from the
government
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. Educated people and
health
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 is one of
the great
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the greatest
 assets of any country, the help our economic development, social improvement. If
government
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 should pay all the expenses for
education
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 and
health
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 it will give a great feedback in
future
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the future
, a huge number of working capable people were available to develop our economic situation and make a sustainable development.
For example
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, in Bangladesh educations rate was only 34% before 2000 when
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government
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the government
make
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makes
 the primary and secondary
education
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 free for all
student
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students
 the number of educated people should increase now it almost
two fold
twice as great or many
twofold
form
a giver or sender
from
 the 2000 level.
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, technological development
make
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makes
 all think available to
people but
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people, but
it
it is
it's
 costly, sometime people is not able to bear it. So
government
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 needs to make policy to pay all medical help and
health
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care
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facility
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 to the local people. When people should pay their
health
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care
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 fees they should not able to get better treatment because lack of money and assets. When
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government
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the government
 should pay all fees,
then
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 an equality situation created in our
society
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,
government
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 should able to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 all of their plans and
policy
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policies
. In sum, when
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government
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the government
 pays all of the expenditure of
education
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 and
health
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, they can ensure all people get
better
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a better education
education
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 and medical
facility
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.
However
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, when people should pay it creates an imbalance
society
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 that will be harmful
for
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to
 our
society
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. So
government
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 should pay all the expenses to make a sustainable
society
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.
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