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Some film companies spend millions of dollars on the production of a single movie Is it necessary to spend a lot of money to make a good movie? What factors contribute to the success of movie? Give reasons your answer and include every relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There are many producers who make very expensive movies. The
first
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 in our mind is probably Hollywood.
On the other hand
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, money is not always guaranty f
or
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of
success. M
ilions
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Millions
of dollars can help for sure, but s
toryline,
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the storyline
creativity
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 and many other factors have m
uch more important impact
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a much more important impact
and cause g
reater effect
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greater effects
a greater effect
on a
udience.
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the audience
audiences
 In my opinion story and way of s
tory telling
The act or practice of telling stories
storytelling
 sells cinema tickets. There are many projects recorded in one room and with just two actors and it had s
trong influence
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a strong influence
on public and got a
ward
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an award
the award
on film festivals. Movies based on true story are interesting because p
ublic
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the public
have in mind that it really happened and it can increase art effect.
For instance
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, new i
ndian
a member of the race of people living in America when Europeans arrived
Indian
indie
film “Pihu” is about l
ittle girl,
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a little girl
the little girl
 2 years old, which stayed alone at home with her dead mother. Public assessed it as the most stressful in modern society and it is recorded in one apartment with two actors.
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, large expenditure is not always related w
ith
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to
popularity and high level art.
Also
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, the child from “Pihu” was not famous a
ctor but
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actor, but
on the other s
ide it
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side, it
was a big challenge to work with kid and gain sense of real life. It presents a
creativity
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 of f
ilmmaker.
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filmmakers
the filmmaker
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, “The death of a man in the Balkans” is the shortest role of actor Nikola Kojo but it was more than noticed. These peace of art was very successful and awarded. Same as you can buy a d
ress but
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dress, but
not a s
tile
how something is done or how it happens
style
you can
also
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 have a money but not
creativity
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. At the and, public want to have a good time, to escape from reality and feel somebody s life and they don t care about how many million it costed. So, making movie i
s consist
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consists
of talent, originality and
creativity
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.
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