The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, during the period 2010-2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, during the period 2010-2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the data of
boys
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and
girls
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who succeeded in their high school competency exam during the period 2010-2011, sorted by
subjects
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According to
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the data, there were roughly equivalents between
boys
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and
girls
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in more than half of the
subjects
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However
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, there were still some significant differences.
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, there were dominants of female students in most of the
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. The most significant difference
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in chemistry and computer science. Especially, there was 30,2% of
girls
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passed the competency exam, more than double the percentage in that category for
boys
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.
Remaining
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subjects
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which experienced
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roughly equal were history, foreign languages and mathematics. Heading to the exception, Geography was the only subject witnessed
boys
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prevailed
girls
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in the number of passed students. The proportion
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boys
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acquired
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success in geography was nearly
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third
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whereas
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the percentage of the opposite gender was only more than
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one-fifth
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Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, girls, subjects with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Competency exams
  • High school
  • Pass rate
  • Disparity
  • Performance gap
  • Subject-specific analysis
  • Year-to-year progression
  • Regression
  • Overall trends
  • Significant
  • Notably wide/narrow
  • Conclusion
  • Observations
  • Consistencies
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