This chart below shows the percentage of people who at five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.

This chart below shows the percentage of people who at five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
This
bar chart illustrates information about the proportion of men, women and
children
who were consuming five servings of
fruit
and vegetable a day in the United Kingdom for seven years, from the year 2001
till
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2008.
Overall
, women experienced the highest percentage of eating
fruit
and vegetables,
while
children
accounted for the lowest proportion.
Furthermore
, there is a significant increase in the
numbers
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of consuming these food items. The percentage of women who ate
fruit
and vegetables started at just over 20% in 2001.
This
then
rose
up
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steadily to a peak of 36% in 2006. In the final year, it dropped down to 30%. In terms of men and
children
eating
fruit
and vegetables, the rate remained relatively the same in the first three years, with approximately 17% and 12%. From
this
point, men climbed gradually to a peak of 27% in both 2006 and 2007, which
finally
dropped to 26%.
Children
experienced an upward trend to 25% in 2007 and decreased to 24% in the final year.
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