This chart below shows the percentage of people who at five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.

This chart below shows the percentage of people who at five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
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bar chart illustrates information about the proportion of men, women and
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who were consuming five servings of
fruit
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and vegetable a day in the United Kingdom for seven years, from the year 2001
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2008.
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, women experienced the highest percentage of eating
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and vegetables,
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children
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accounted for the lowest proportion.
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, there is a significant increase in the
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of consuming these food items. The percentage of women who ate
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and vegetables started at just over 20% in 2001.
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rose
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steadily to a peak of 36% in 2006. In the final year, it dropped down to 30%. In terms of men and
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eating
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and vegetables, the rate remained relatively the same in the first three years, with approximately 17% and 12%. From
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point, men climbed gradually to a peak of 27% in both 2006 and 2007, which
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dropped to 26%.
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experienced an upward trend to 25% in 2007 and decreased to 24% in the final year.
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