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Some individuals feel that working from home, while of benefit to employees, is actually a drawback for employers.

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It is true technology is increasing for working
from
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for
with
 national. Some people think that working from
home
 appears to bring many
benefit
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benefits
 to employees but not the employers. I partially agree with
this
 statement. On the one hand, the spread of telecommunication technology using the internet, mobile phone and tablet PC has opened new possibilities for workers.
Firstly
, working from
home
 is not only benefit to employees, but it
also
 profit to employers. Working
at
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on
in
 native can save employers many working experiences.
For instance
, employees working at household, employers not need to provide them some basic facilities like
parking a place for
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a parking place for
 their vehicles, stationary for their use and other necessities
such
 as water, canteen, toilet, lighting.
Secondly
, employers can save a lot of expenditure. They can work at
home
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home, also
also
 increase productivity and competency.
Thirdly
, masses whose job
is
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have been
are being
 to design website usually require creative and
comfort
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comfortable
 environment to provide
require
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required
 environment. So it can be more logical to employees to work at
home
 and
also
 create their ideal environment. Workers provide more time for their work and its benefited to companies.
On the other hand
, some people disagree with
this
 condition, they believe that working at national it not an effective thing.
Furthermore
, it is difficult for companies to control workers who are working from
homely
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home
.
Moreover
, they think the employees working from
home
 it affect their family and might
distraction
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distract
 their children. To conclude, it is clear that working from
home
 can bring potential benefits for employers as much as, but not only allowed for working at
home
.

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