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Employers should give their workers at least one month holiday a year as it makes them to do better at their job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People's opinions differ whether or not managers should give staff at least 28 days off per year to improve their job performance.As far as I'm concerned, I strongly agree with the above statement.My arguments to
this
 point are listed as follows. The main reason for my propensity is that holidays make employees
work
 more effectively. As we know,
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owadays,
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hey have to spend at least 8 hours a day working. It makes them feel more stressful
,b
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ored and pressure.
Consequently
, their
work
 qualities will fall down day by day, their healths will be probably affected and their companies' profits will suffer a lot. So, I believe that a long holiday is one of the best ways to deal with
this
 problem. It enables them to reduce a lot stress they faced up with during their
work
 and boost them for working
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Take Google as an example,
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his company provides its staff a month compulsory for the holiday.
Therefore
,
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they can stay away from
work
 and rejuvenate. Another reason can be seen by everyone is that when they
work
 for a long period
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they will hardly ever have much time for families,
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riends and especially for themselves. When you spend very little time for them, it is rather easy to lead to the broken relationships
.
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As a result
,
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hey cannot concentrate on your
work
 and maybe it makes their productivity decrease. A long vacation every year helps them n
ot only remain
Suggestion
doesn't only remain
don't only remain
relationships with each other, but
also
 pursue other productive activities
such
 as reading,
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hotography,... From what has been discussed above
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employees who are given at least one month holiday
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ot only
work
 better to increase production and proceeds but they
also
 are mentally and physically strong.
This
 will absolutely make economic development and stabilize society.
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