The pie chart below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years

The pie chart below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years
These pie charts depict the production of energy in different
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for two years in
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France. It is clear from the graph that,
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coal and gas is the major source in both years in general.
According to
what is shown, the change
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coal is slightly small which is 29.80% and 30.93% in 1995 and 2005 respectively
also
the gas had
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pattern compare to coal the change
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0.7
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% difference between the 10 years.
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had
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alteration in the proportion, which is 29.27% decreased to 19.55% in 1995 and 2005 respectively Meanwhile,
on the other hand
, the energy produced by nuclear power had increased by almost 4%; since 1995
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, the other resources had similar behaviour
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nuclear power climbed
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4.9% in 1995 to 9.10% in 2005.
To sum up
, we could say that the energy power of France had been better to be more balanced.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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