The pie chart below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years
These pie charts depict the production of energy in different
type
for two years in Fix the agreement mistake
types
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France. It is clear from the graph that, Correct article usage
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the
coal and gas is the major source in both years
in general.
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According to
what is shown, the change of
coal is slightly small which is 29.80% and 30.93% in 1995 and 2005 respectively Change preposition
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the gas had similar
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only
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0.7
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The petrol
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alteration in the proportion, which is 29.27% decreased to 19.55% in 1995 and 2005 respectively
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on the other hand
, the energy produced by nuclear power had increased by almost 4%; since 1995 moreover
, the other resources had similar behaviour of
nuclear power climbed Change preposition
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up to
4.9% in 1995 to 9.10% in 2005.
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To sum up
, we could say that the energy power of France had been better to be more balanced.Submitted by s-88k on
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