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Some say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their spare time. Other say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both views and give you own opinion

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In recent years due to drastic change in technology and lifestyle, Relationship and perspective of parents towards children has changed. Some feel that parent's guidance and experience
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are
 important for child
growth whereas
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growth, whereas
 others feel it's good for children to grow on
self
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 learning and evaluation.
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 essay will discuss both
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points
 of view. Parents encouragement towards group activities is vital as
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 will encourage children to bring out their point of view and create a sense of importance in the group.A strong sense of sharing and caring develops and
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 teaches pits and peaks of life.Team work being a demanding quality in the society today gets
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built
 from
scartch
cause friction
scratch
. Parents
encourage
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are encouraged
 the leadership qualities and create a social space for children. They imbibe to collaborate and coordinate with different people.
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, some people believe that
self
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 help is the best help.
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self
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Self
 learning and evaluation makes children more perfect and helps in handling
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the situation
situations
 on their own. Through
self
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 learning they get to know their passion and work on it. These children have strong determination and set short term goals for themselves to reach long term goals. As they are
self
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 motivated, they don't get into depression and move on quickly. They always keep themselves
engaged according
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engaged, according
 to their surroundings and tackle activities in a better way Overall, I personally feel that
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 identification and learning combined with
team work
cooperative work done by a team (especially when it is effective)
teamwork
 can lead to
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the large
large
 scale of success. Both parents guidance and
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 Analysis is important in my point of view

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