The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the
amount
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of men and women in
further
education in Britain in three different periods and whether they were studying
full time
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full-time
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or part-time.
Overall
, it’s clear that male and female
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have different results. Only a small percentage used to attend class part-time compared to the scheme.
While
the males have a
slightly
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decrease in the different years for the full-time system
instead
for females is the opposite with a
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increase
by
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the
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time. As we can see in the graph the best score is in
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1990/1991 for women with more
1000
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enrollments and for men just 20 years before. The negative view can
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as the worst year for part-time studying was 1970/1971. In the same
year
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the men reached the best result for full-time with an average
around
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1000 goers . It’s predicted that in
large
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majority
the
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full time
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full-time
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studying system compared to part-time with big odds.

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