Some people believe that time spent on television, video and computer games can be beneficial to children. Others believe this has negative effects on a child. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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with the invention and popularization of new technologies, current generation tends to differ from the people who belonged to the olden era in many ways.While
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many people have voiced their opinion that the time kids invest in watching the television and playing video games can be harmful to them
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others don't agree and believe that these can be beneficial.I
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believe, although
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there are many benefits
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the above mentioned activities, certain drawbacks should be considered. Everyone has favourite pastime
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which allows the person to indulge in some interesting work and
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helps to relieve all the stress.
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because after the long day at school
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he/she feels mentally drained.
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a preferred cartoon show or a computer game can cheer up the kid.
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the child feels enthusiastic and pumped up for the day.
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TV programmes can be very informative and games can help them
tackle few
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tackle a few
situations with their presence of mind.
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in an interview
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a young boy in my city who won the national science quiz mentioned that some shows related to science helped him answer many questions.
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the addiction
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many little ones have lost the most precious time of their lives by engaging themselves in addictive games.To illustrate
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the recent trend of the game called PUBG created
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a sensation
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games
among youngsters and
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the untimely deaths
of many teens due to excessive exposure.
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being fascinated and enchanted
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the juveniles get deviated from their path of education and end up in
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a miserable state
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even though there are various flaws of being drifted away and becoming sluggish
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I believe, technology
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if allowed to use under parental guidance with restrictions on the time period
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these can prove to be stress busters and helpful to the kids.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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