The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The
graduate’s
count of a country determines the country’s Change noun form
graduate
education
strength. The graph provides the
data about university Correct article usage
apply
graduate
numbers in Canada from 1992 to 2007.This
essay will discuss about
the information provided about Remove the preposition
apply
graduate
count in Canada between 1992 to 2007.
In Add an article
the graduate
this
data
there is Add a comma
,data
obvious
increase in university Add an article
an obvious
the obvious
graduate
numbers from 1992 to 2006.the gender bias is Cleary noticed in the graph where the female graduate
counts exceed the male graduate
counts from earlier years still 2006. The bias is more significant because there is almost 30,000
count difference.
The reason for the female Correct article usage
a 30,000
graduate
counts domination over males can be many, such
as male’s responsibility towards their family, maturity level, self-confidence and so on. For example
, for a male
the responsibility of taking care of the family comes in Add a comma
,male
very
early stages of their life , which may push them to skip their Correct article usage
the very
education
and work for the welfare of their family especially when they are from poor
background. There are studies showing that females have more confidence and interest in formal theoretical Add an article
a poor
education
than male
Fix the agreement mistake
males
this
also
could be one of the reasons for the bias.
In conclusion
the data provided shows Add a comma
,conclusion
great
difference in Add an article
a great
female
getting Fix the agreement mistake
females
education
pretty well than Correct article usage
an education
male
Fix the agreement mistake
males
this
can be solved by making the classes more practical and also
by providing full scholarships for financially unstable persons.Submitted by surejajasmin10 on
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